After reviewing my feedback from project one I have thought of a few things that I could add or improve on. First of all, in the beginning of my essay I had a small typo that should have been caught before I submitted the assignment. Also, the essay really could have been a lot stronger if I were to take more time to put emphasis on my mother's and mine relationship. I talked about it very briefly in various paragraphs but nothing that would have affect on my audience. In terms of detail, I also plan to talk a little bit more about my moms side of the story. As of right now, my essay is propaganda. The closest I get to telling her side of the story is talking about how I was trying to understand and relate to her. No matter how thorough my understanding was, it is not truly her side of the story. However there is one part of my essay that needs for description of my emotions. When I tell the story of my mom getting sick after her last cigarette, I fail to describe how that situation made me feel.
In terms of my podcast, however, I was to add more sound effects and music. At first I was against the background music but now I feel that it would only make the piece stronger.
